What happens after a manuscript is bought by a publisher? Well, you pop a cork of bubbly and break the glass shade on your kitchen chandelier. But don’t worry, your advance will cover the repair. (That’s what I told my husband.)
I received an offer for my first picture book, THE MONSTORE, from Aladdin/Simon & Schuster in early May and accepted, after brief negotiations, shortly thereafter. By the end of June, my editor sent me the first round of edits, with the first revision due August 1st.
I opened the Word document and couldn’t believe all the RED.
Stuff was slashed. Crimson comment boxes asked me to change words…and entire passages. And most baffling of all, I thought my editor didn’t like my ending. I felt overwhelmed.
That’s when a good agent swoops in and saves you from having a toddler-like meltdown. A conference call was what I needed to understand the reasoning behind the red. The following week, my editor, editorial assistant and agent called and we ran through every detail. And, guess what? I didn’t feel so overwhelmed anymore. That’s what. (Sorry, there’s a little Junie B. Jones creeping in.) My editor had a great vision, and I agreed with every change she suggested. Big sigh of relief.
Then I had a month to make the changes.
I tried procrastinating. I played a lot of online Boggle. (My high score is 174.)
Honestly, I didn’t know how to tackle the revision—how I would solve the little problems that, at the time, seemed HUGE.
Then I remembered Anne LaMott’s BIRD BY BIRD. So that’s what I did. I took it bird by bird.
The first day I changed the manuscript from 1st person to 3rd. Send over the red button from Staples because that was easy.
The next day, I thought visually. My editor said some of the objects and actions in the manuscript, like a bag of moldy bread, and a monster slithering, wouldn’t come across well in illustrations. She asked me to think of details that were more visually interesting—things that would be humorous to draw, but also fun to read aloud. And, one of those things had to tie into the denouement.
My editor had paginated the manuscript, and she asked me to think of each page turn as a mini-cliffhanger. She did such a bang-up job on the pages, I didn’t need to do much there.
Then came the ending. Remember how I thought my editor didn’t like it? Well, she loved it. She just wanted me to stretch out the denouement. But how? I spent days staring at the screen. I’d come up with an idea, then erase it. And another. Delete. Then save. Then trash. This went on for a fortnight, until, by George, I think she’s got it! (I’ve always wanted to feel like Audrey Hepburn. That was my moment.)
I finished the first revision on June 27th, with enough time to email it to my agent for review before sending it to my editor just under the August 1st buzzer. My agent was thrilled, I was thrilled that my agent was thrilled, and let’s just say the word THRILLED ping-ponged between us that week.
My manuscript had gone from 522 words up to 730 to fit in the changes, but I thought that would be OK.
I was wrong.
The second round of edits arrived in early September. MORE RED. Cut, cut, cut! My editor liked the new denouement, but it was too wordy, bogging down the pace of the story. “This can be shown in illustration,” she said several times. I agreed. (And added those devilish art notes.) I slashed and burned, taking the manuscript down to 589 words.
So now it’s ready to ship out once again, way ahead of my November 1st deadline for the final manuscript.
But guess what? I think there will a lot more changes from now until then, but they’ll make the story even better. That’s what.
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September 25, 2010 at 4:59 pm
beckylevine
Okay, so I really didn’t need to know about online Boggle!
Other than that, this sounds like a combination nightmare & dream–the dream being, of course, that it’s your EDITOR telling you this stuff. 🙂 It’s so good to hear this, Tara–not all the work you’re doing, but the feeling you so clearly have that your book is getting better and better as you do the work. Yay for you! Can’t WAIT to read it.
September 26, 2010 at 2:03 pm
tara
Online Boggle sucks up a lot of my time. But I’ve been a life-long Boggle lover. It’s one of the games my family used to play often when I was growing up. Now I play on Pogo. You can find me in the “Let’s Be Friends” room.
September 25, 2010 at 7:30 pm
Caroline Starr Rose
I spent the summer going through edits, too! Just found out yesterday the manuscript has been accepted.
All the best to you!
September 26, 2010 at 1:55 pm
tara
Congratulations, Caroline! I look forward to hearing about your behind-the-scenes progress.
September 26, 2010 at 6:49 am
Anna
Thanks for sharing! I’m glad things have worked out, despite all the red. 🙂 I can’t wait to be able to read the book one day soon.
September 26, 2010 at 10:18 am
Julie Hedlund
Fascinating look at the inside of the process. And a funny one too – that’s what! 🙂
September 26, 2010 at 11:07 am
Joanne Fritz
Tara, I’m so glad you’re back. I rarely comment, but often lurk.
Thanks so much for the insider tips on the revision process. Sounds like a lot of work, but worth it. Congrats.
I’m especially intrigued that you’re ALLOWED to include art notes. I thought editors frowned on that (you know, the idea that the illustrator doesn’t suggest to YOU how to write your story, so you’re not supposed to tell the illustrator how to do the illustrations!) Or perhaps it’s only allowed after your ms has been accepted?
September 26, 2010 at 2:01 pm
tara
Joanne, my original manuscript had limited art notes. I put them only where they were really required–like when I said something different than what the illustration should show, or, when the meaning of the phrase was vague without seeing the picture. In those cases, they were visual jokes.
But after my editor saw the manuscript, she cut some wordy details and said it could be shown in illustration, so when I cut the text, I put those details in an art note so we could remember my original intention. However, I realize the illustrator may have a far better interpretation than I–a grander vision–so my art notes may not be adhered to. And guess what? That’s OK with me. That’s what! LOL! The illustrator is going to make this book better than I can possibly imagine, I’m sure of that.
September 26, 2010 at 11:47 am
Diana Murray
Thank you for that revealing glimpse behind the scenes!
September 27, 2010 at 11:27 am
Kristin Gray
Thanks, Tara! I feel at times I use too many art notes. It’s a hard balance.
September 27, 2010 at 11:39 am
Kristi Valiant
Congrats on your acquisition! Thanks for giving us a peek of your behind the scenes progress.
September 27, 2010 at 8:58 pm
Catherine Johnson
Congrats Tara and thanks for the inside info.
September 28, 2010 at 2:39 pm
Tricia
congratulations on both the agent and selling the manuscript. It was good for me to hear of all the red, because if there can be that many edits in a 600 word piece, I can’t image for a novel. Better to be prepared ahead of time.
September 30, 2010 at 12:14 am
Agatja
I am glad to know that I am the not the only one who truly struggles with revisions.
October 1, 2010 at 3:25 am
Dana
Thanks for a good read. You managed to be informative and funny all the while recounting a character-building experience (to say the least!). Way to go, Tara!
October 2, 2010 at 10:17 am
Kelli @ writing the waves
Wow! Congratulations! Thanks for sharing your process too. Picture book manuscripts are not as easy as they look – that’s for sure!
October 2, 2010 at 2:41 pm
tara
Thanks, Kelli! Are you writing picture books, too?
October 3, 2010 at 1:07 pm
Michael
Tara–Excellent description of the emotionally charged editing process! It’s great to hear that you’re working with an editor with whom you’ve got a good rapport, which makes all the difference. Can’t wait to see the finished product!
October 3, 2010 at 10:13 pm
Janet Wagner from Creative Writing
Read the descriptor about “Monstore”, and I can’t wait to read it to my students! Picture books spark as much creativity in middle school kids as they do with the elementary-aged crowd!
October 9, 2010 at 5:41 pm
tara
Thanks, Janet! Glad to hear that picture books are being used with the older kids as well as the younger.
October 4, 2010 at 10:20 pm
AZ
Glad to hear you felt good about the editor’s vision and suggestions. So nice when that happens!
October 5, 2010 at 1:48 am
George Shannon-Author
Yes. Walking the tight-rope of being edited is never a day at the beach! The balance of being open and relatively non-defensive so I’m able to really hear and consider the editor’s comments and being grounded enough in my approach to the story that I don’t let an editor turn it into something that isn’t me or mine. Most often it comes down to this: if it feels like the editor truly shares my vision and goal for the story then I’ll try just about any and everything suggested. Try, but not necessarily do. If it begins to feel like the editor wants me to morph my peach into a potato then I know I need to honor my work and politely say, “No.” Then send it off to other editor immediately AND get busy on a new story.
Happy writing,
George Shannon
October 6, 2010 at 8:37 pm
tara
Thank you for sharing your experience and perspective, George!